tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7632571198447504695.post3231996060604465957..comments2023-10-31T08:03:02.098-07:00Comments on Fond of Blond: The Battle of POV...along with some music.Jenniehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17484981381069210742noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7632571198447504695.post-32438590494906380062011-08-21T05:31:44.885-07:002011-08-21T05:31:44.885-07:00I really love the point of view, actually! In fact...I really love the point of view, actually! In fact, I think it works wonderfully in this piece, because it allows me to connect so fully with both characters. Their emotions were so strong, so reflective of each other that I believe the point of view only made the scene stronger. And OH HOW SEXY the end of the scene was. Their dancing...whew, girl! You are fabulous at evoking emotion in your reader, and the emotion that I felt was that I wanted to go cuddle up with my hubby...hehe :)<br /><br />GREAT WORK! I'd LOVE to read this novel after that heated and emotional scene. Thanks so much for linking this up!Katie @ Chicken Noodle Gravyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02852793993330125727noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7632571198447504695.post-37001870735939052062011-08-16T01:07:04.775-07:002011-08-16T01:07:04.775-07:00Can I make a comment that has nothing to do with t...Can I make a comment that has nothing to do with the POV?<br /><br />:)<br /><br />The first line about the Grey Goose martini is what caught my eye. Now, I know don't drink, and that is totally okay, but I would never call any of my drinks by their brand name. To me, it's a glass of wine, or a pitcher of beer, or a martini (or apple martini if that is the flavour), saying Grey Goose sort of just caught me off guard. Now, if Grey Goose has something to do with the story, totally keep in in there.<br /><br />Anywho, I hope you don't mind my input, and if you don't like it, don't use it! :P<br /><br />Love the rest of it thoughAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7632571198447504695.post-48971507563789303392011-08-13T18:33:10.605-07:002011-08-13T18:33:10.605-07:00I agree w/Jen. My interest was held throughout and...I agree w/Jen. My interest was held throughout and upon finishing, I questioned how this could be written from a different POV while still giving the reader enough details about your two main characters. Perhaps, taking a cue from someone like Jennifer Weiner who changes the POV from chapter to chapter could work? However, from this entry, I think it works. <br />(just my .02)Jackiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18076696497945939880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7632571198447504695.post-80556744769820261712011-08-13T14:54:37.201-07:002011-08-13T14:54:37.201-07:00Frankly, I was caught up in this from the moment I...Frankly, I was caught up in this from the moment I started reading and could sense the building romantic tension in the bar. Two people dancing to a song they hope never ends.<br /><br />Don't hate me for picking on this one thing in this sentence....<br /> "She tried ignoring the man from her peripheral vision that had been steeling glances at her all night, his eyes mysterious over the rim of his glass." <br />Steeling, I think, should be "stealing"; it just caught my eye and I kept going back to re-read it, certain it was a typo. <br /><br />You leave me wanting more, more, more...please!!Pattyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00983686239033756332noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7632571198447504695.post-31430674790874240782011-08-13T14:08:19.660-07:002011-08-13T14:08:19.660-07:00So if you didn't do this POV, whose would you ...So if you didn't do this POV, whose would you do? I think you should stick with it how it is...and I'm not just saying that because I like your writing. I wasn't at all confused. The 5th paragraph had me reading it twice, but that could have just been me. Either way, the end had me wanting to know more of the story...which is what the main goal of writing a book is, right? <br />I'm babbling...I'll stop now :)Jenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17940118384108153753noreply@blogger.com