Which is what I did. I have never, until now, posted anything from my fiction novels on my blog, so this post is even harder for me than the last one. Because this is a tiny bit of one of the projects I've spent hours and hours on.
So, please, constructive criticism is welcome!
But be nice!
So here goes. This is a brief excerpt from my most recent novel, The Exception.
Sam reached into his pocket to retrieve the key, then unlocked and opened the door behind Elanor. He motioned inside with his hand.
The interior lurked behind her, the unnerving energy waiting. She felt it, saturated in memories. His eyes gave her strength and she swallowed hard, retreating until she was inside. As he closed the door behind him, leaving them in murkiness, she quietly said, “I believe forging keys is illegal.”
He chuckled. “I’ve had this key since before you were born,” he said, feeling strange again about their reunion. “You should be grateful. I’ve kept this house what it still is.”
Grasping his shoulders and reaching on her tiptoes, she kissed him lightly on the cheek. “And I can’t thank you enough.”
His eyes grew wide. It seemed that something once so innocent wasn’t anymore. She lightly cleared her throat. “Anyway, I believe you had a question to answer. And now that we’re inside, no more games. Time to spill your guts.”
Elanorstayed in place, keeping her eyes on the door as Sam made his way to every window and lifted the drapes, allowing light to infiltrate the house. “First you have to take this in,” he said. “This is your house now, Lanor. You have to accept it.”
She sighed, furrowing her brow as she slowly turned. The dust danced in the sunlight, but everything wasn’t caked in it as she expected. It was clean, immaculate even. It almost looked lived-in, and seeing it in this condition made it easier to take in, unlike the way she remembered it—the way she expected it still to look. Her mouth hung in surprise. “Sam…”
“I’m sorry. I hope you don’t mind I come in sometimes. Cleaning helps me feel…sane.”
“It’s perfect,” she said, staring into his eyes.
“I get bored,” he shrugged.
Pulled by an intruding memory, she stepped past him and knelt on the faded hardwood floor by the stairs. She ran her hand over it, feeling its smooth surface as she searched for any trace of blood. Being in this place brought it all back, that night now fresh in the forefront of her mind. She could hear her father standing just to her right, snaring her with his honey-sweet lies, his love a sham. She could see his face, the way no trace of life remained behind his eyes. She could feel herself hitting the wall, smashing the mirror and table, hear the clatter as she was showered with glass. She felt him crushing her, heard her screams. She felt her heart shattering.
She felt Sam’s warm blood on her hands, felt the shuddering of his chest as she held him, imaging his life being sucked away.
Sam knelt next to her, watching as she caressed the floor, absorbing the memories. She was feeling them all over again with the touch of her hand and releasing them with her silent tears. He touched her shoulder. “I’m still here,” he softly reminded her.